http://mystopsnoringremedies.com/70/dawn-at-the-humble-tower-a-poem-you-like/ Get The Best Remedies To Stop Your Snoring For Better Marriage Life Wed, 25 May 2011 05:27:33 -0500 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 http://mystopsnoringremedies.com/70/dawn-at-the-humble-tower-a-poem-you-like/comment-page-1/#comment-394 Joe L Wed, 23 Sep 2009 21:24:55 +0000 http://mystopsnoringremedies.com/70/dawn-at-the-humble-tower-a-poem-you-like/#comment-394 Very descriptive piece of a daily routine. You stressed on the details, employed metaphors and simile, but the wording tends to be (a bit) lengthy. Here is my notes on this poem: * You chose to rhyme, but didn't follow a rhyme scheme: - S1: abba; - S2, S4-S6: aabb; - S3: abcc. This doesn't go with the structure. * The wording could be concentrated, and put all those poetic expressions into more structure ( especially the rhythm) . Compared to your previous poem, this seems in a lot better shape. That's to say, you made noticeable progress. Thanks for sharing this poem! Very descriptive piece of a daily routine. You stressed on the details, employed metaphors and simile, but the wording tends to be (a bit) lengthy.
Here is my notes on this poem:
* You chose to rhyme, but didn’t follow a rhyme scheme:
– S1: abba;
– S2, S4-S6: aabb;
– S3: abcc. This doesn’t go with the structure.
* The wording could be concentrated, and put all those poetic expressions into more structure ( especially the rhythm) .
Compared to your previous poem, this seems in a lot better shape. That’s to say, you made noticeable progress.
Thanks for sharing this poem!

]]> http://mystopsnoringremedies.com/70/dawn-at-the-humble-tower-a-poem-you-like/comment-page-1/#comment-393 Life_is Wed, 23 Sep 2009 20:19:07 +0000 http://mystopsnoringremedies.com/70/dawn-at-the-humble-tower-a-poem-you-like/#comment-393 A wonderment of a morning description! A wonderment of a morning description!

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